I am activly taking your crit into consideration when i do a completed version of chapter one, but for now here is some progress, be sure to check back on friday to see this more fleshed out, also tell me if theres anything that i missed. I
Good stuff Matt! Page 11 looks really good. The last panel of the Colonel is exactly how I envisioned it.
We can definitely clean up the panels (actually make them dirtier with the uniforms, beards, cuts, bruises, etc.) and I'm seeing spots to shorten dialogue too.
I had dinner with my friend Tony last night. He said he was hooked on the story just a few pages in and can't wait to see more.
Good stuff Matt! Page 11 looks really good. The last panel of the Colonel is exactly how I envisioned it.
ReplyDeleteWe can definitely clean up the panels (actually make them dirtier with the uniforms, beards, cuts, bruises, etc.) and I'm seeing spots to shorten dialogue too.
I had dinner with my friend Tony last night. He said he was hooked on the story just a few pages in and can't wait to see more.
sweet, can't wait to put out more
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